In the two sample essays that we were provided, I found that the most prominent difference between those works and my own was the strength of the thesis. Mine was certainly forceful, but it was not as narrow as the ones in the assigned papers. Also one of the assigned papers made use of footnotes, which my paper may have benefited from, although I was not looking for a reason to use footnotes, because I have never used them in my writing before. Another large difference was the smooth integration of rhetorical theory. I made rhetorical theory the subject of most of my body paragraphs, rather than as added support for the support I should have been providing to the argument of my thesis through my body paragraphs. Overall, the papers that were provided were generally more adept in the integration of evidence into the paper’s main argument in such a way as to prevent summarizing.