Activity 1:
The thesis statement is broad and doesn’t narrow down to a specific argument. He is questioning his own argument and he seems unsure that thesis statements are his greatest weakness.
Activity 2:
I would probably give him a 3 or 4 because his thesis statement isn’t very good, and is broad and he talks about other things not related to his thesis in the paper. He does have a good amount of information and examples but he could have more examples from his own writing to help the paper.
Activity 3:
I would probably give the paper a 2, because the thesis is not clear at all at he has a lack of examples from his own writings. He does however, explain himself and where his writing has come this semester very well.
Activity 4:
The thesis doesn’t really tell us what he learned in the class or how he learned to overcome it. He wrote more about what his problem was with writing, not really how he was able to fix it.
Activity 5:
Ive learned not to write unless I want a 1-3 paper. I’ve learned about the importance of answering the prompt, and have a narrow thesis statement that goes along with my body paragraphs. I should also provide many direct examples from my papers to support my argument in order to get a better grade on my paper.