What is Janet doing?
Janet explains what the paper is about and defines terms the audience should already know. It is boring and explains too much of what the audience knows.
What is roger doing?
Roger starts out his paper with a real world situation that grabs the reader’s attention, and it makes me want to keep reading the paper.
What is roger doing that’s better?
Roger doesn’t not state information the reader already knows and Roger keeps the reader interested with examples.
Set guidelines off Roger.
I should keep my introduction exciting, to the point and fast-paced. I should ask questions to the reader to keep them thinking and engaged with what I’m writing. I should use examples.