Activity 1:

The main problem with this thesis statement is as the title indicates, it does talk in circles. Directly starting out and ending with thesis statement, in the topic sentence, causes the sentence to lack variety. The fact that it’s actually split up into two sentences makes it all the more difficult to follow. Further it sets the paper up to be confusing as normally thesis statement include, in order, the points that will be covered throughout. This one however leaves us with nothing – will we talk about how they are normally too vague and how the rest of the time they don’t exist? Or will other points be covered.

Activity 2:

I would give the paper a 3 because even based on the thesis its going to be neglecting parts of the prompt. Also, its just illogical, talking in circles and lacking organization of thoughts.

Activity 3:

I do think that this paper is a 3. Mainly because it’s not all that bad, but it does in parts not fully address the parts of the prompt. Some parts of it aren’t fully connected and developed logically with organization. In general, there are some obvious sections that exhibit flaws in grammar.

Final Activity:

From this lesson and the activities completed I learned that one of the key to writing a strong reflective essay is to create a focused and well thought out thesis statement. A good thesis statement makes it easier to write a well-organized essay and it keeps the essay focused on the main points that support the prompt.