One part of my essay that needed to be worked on was the thesis statement. Professor Smith was one of the few people that found this point. Although my statement held credit, the way I expressed that across could’ve been more expletive. My statement was consistent of how literature shaped and built my view of the world. The rest of my paper giving examples and analyses into this theoretical idea. However, it was stated that after reading my paper this point was clear to many. Just not within the first paragraph which was my initial idea. My plan going further is to finish my statement with my thesis sentence once again. Allowing for my point to be clear in the beginning. Moreover, my citing for my paper was an area of improvement. I used the right quotes and paraphrasing. Although my in-text citing needed to be cleaned up. For example, putting the author and page number rather than the year of the book which was previously taught to me. In my opinion, these two areas were the main areas for concern. I felt that my ideas were strong and were presented in a good enough way for the reader to truly see my perspective. But it wasn’t a perfect piece of work which shows that there are multiple areas that still needed to be worked on.

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