Reflective Essay
ERH-102
Maj. Garriott
Harrison Robinson
A Journey from Wrong to Right
By Harrison Robinson
Help Received: Writing Center, Maj Garriott, and Cadet Brittany Szczepanik
Writing has always been my weakest subject, for good reason, yet I’ve continuously worked to improve. My first semester at VMI the ERH-101 professor taught me what it meant to write in college, giving me a basic understanding of how to write a thesis and construct a paper using the skills in the “Everyday Writer” and “Writing about Writing” textbooks. Things changed in the second semester when I entered ERH-102 for the first time. The ERH professor was a lot more demanding when it came to papers, wanting me to dig deeper thereby allowing me to self-improve over the course of the semester. While being pushed by this teacher I realized several things I need to work on in my writing. The most prevalent was the purpose of a thesis in my papers. I needed to establish my argument in the main body and keep with that main thought throughout the paper by making sure my argument is clear in each paragraph. This way my audience will understand what I will be arguing and can follow my train of thought more clearly.
The first writing prompt I was assigned in ERH-102 was ‘Reading and Writing as a Believer and Doubter, Part 1’. The assignment was to select a law or controversial topic, a topic we felt strongly about then argue from the opposite view point of our belief. The topic I choose to write about was background checks on applicants with a criminal history. To begin this paper I tried to sum up everything I was thinking and put it into my opening paragraph, giving the reader information I thought they needed to understand my thought process.
“Background checks have been around for a long time. They give your future employer references from your past employments, and gives them a record of accomplishment and misdeeds you have done in your life. Whether you are proud of that past or not. That is where my argument arises. People seeking employment that have bad medical history or mental problems do not have to tell their future employer about it until later in the application process. This is to help them since they are at a disadvantage on an equal playing field. The same however, cannot be, said for people with a prior criminal history. People seeking employment that have had prior criminal convictions have to tell the employer at the start of the process. This makes it very hard for people with prior criminal history to get a job. Even if they are the most qualified for the job, because many employers will take quick judgement on the prospective employee without first hearing them out first. This is why I feel like the law needs to change, so that like with mental illness and medical history, the information on your criminal history should not be, discussed until the end of the application process. Making it easier for people with previous criminal convictions to get a job.” (Background Checks on Applicants with Criminal History)
In this part of the opening paragraph I don’t clearly state my thesis even with all the information included in my introductory paragraph. Instead, I give a lot of minor thesis statements that fail to come together based on my actual idea for my argument. The argument was that the nation needs to change The Fair Credit Reporting Act so that questions about criminal history are not asked until the end of the application process.
“Background checks have been around for a long time. They give future employers references from your past employments, and gives them a record of accomplishments and misdeeds you have done in your life. That is where my problem with the Fair Credit Reporting Act arises. Prospective employees seeking employment that have bad medical history or mental problems do not have to tell their future employer about it until later in the application process. This helps them since they are at a disadvantage on an equal playing field with normal people. The same however, cannot be, said for people with a prior criminal history. People seeking employment that have had prior criminal convictions that extends to people with misdemeanors as well as class D and class C felonies must tell the employer at the start of the process. This makes it very hard for people with misdemeanors and low level felonies to get a job. Even if they are the most qualified for the job in question, because many employers will take quick judgement on the prospective employee without first hearing them out. Therefore, I feel like the Fair Credit Reporting Act needs to change, so that like with mental illness and medical history, the information on your criminal history should not be, discussed until the end of the application process. Making it easier for people with misdemeanors as well as class D and class C felonies to get jobs with their records.” (Background Checks on Applicants with Criminal History – Revisions)
In the paragraph revision, I expanded upon my thoughts to make the argument more centralized and focused. I achieved this by clearly stating my argument in the thesis and outlining the points of my argument. Also, I could think more about the details of my argument and add-in the part on the certain types of criminals that should help.
The second prompt of the semester was the same one as before “Reading and Writing as a Believe and Doubter, Part 2” only for this prompt I needed to take the opposite point of view from my previous paper. So, I was going to have to argue for my original ideology on the topic of background checks on people with criminal history however, my opinion had been shifted by the Part 1 assignment. I addressed this with my professor during a meeting saying how I didn’t know what to write in response. The teacher said I needed to “Argue the gray area on this topic. That way I could find a middle ground with the people I would be arguing with.” So, in doing this I tried to push this into my thesis argument instead of trying to inform my reader.
“The point of the Background Check on prospective employees is so the employer can make a good decision about whether they should hire the said prospective employee. It is the right of the employer to decide whether not they want to hire the prospective employee. This means that the employer should be allowed access to the prospective employee’s information to an extent that pertains to the job the prospective employee is applying for. This includes people’s criminal records whether that be a misdemeanor or a felony. The purpose of these background checks is to give employer the needed information to decide on whether the employer should hire the prospective employee into their place of business. It is not the peoples personal right to have a job. Nowhere in the constitution does it say the “People have a right to have a job from employers.”. This is what changing the Fair Credit Reporting Act so it easier for people with prior criminal convictions is not a good idea, because it violates the employers right to a sufficient workforce.” (Background Checks: Don’t Make It Easier for Criminals Applying for Jobs)
In this introductory paragraph, I attempted to find the gray to start my argument however, while I was trying to do this I didn’t state my argument. Instead I just have a confusing paragraph about not changing the fair credit reporting act.
“A movement called “Ban the Box” is trying to change the Fair Credit Reporting Act. This movement is trying to make it so that the check box for criminal activity at the beginning of the application is removed and placed at the end of the application process. The point of the background checks on prospective employees is to give the employer important information about the prospective employee, that way the employer can decide about hiring the prospective employee. It is the right of the employer to decide whether not they want to hire the prospective employee. This means that the employer should be allowed access to the prospective employee’s information to an extent that pertains to the job for which the prospective employee is applying. This includes applicants with criminal records, whether that be a misdemeanor or a felony. The purpose of these background checks is to give employer the needed information to decide on whether the employer should hire the prospective employee into their place of business. It is not the peoples personal right to have a job. Nowhere in the constitution does it say the “People have a right to have a job from employers.”. Therefore, changing the Fair Credit Reporting Act so it easier for people with prior criminal convictions is not a good idea, because it violates the employers right to a sufficient workforce.” (Background Checks: Don’t Make It Easier for Criminals Applying for Jobs – Revisions)
In this I forget trying to find a gray area from my introduction instead choosing to argue my point as the exact opposite like the prompt wanted. In doing so I could clearly state what I wanted to do with The Fair Credit Reporting Act. Instead choosing to move my common ground ideas into my conclusion of the paper. In doing this I could clean up my argument and state it in my thesis so that the audience would better understand what I’m talking about in the paper.
As an International Studies major I must write about my positions a lot for most of my classes. Therefore, ERH-102 is more than just a class with a grade that will be calculated into my overall GPA each year. It is the basis for how I will write argumentative and position papers for the rest of my cadetship as an International Studies major. ERH-102 helped me to realize what I have been doing wrong with my arguments and helped me fix it in a solid position. Because of this I will be able to apply what I learned in ERH-102 for the rest of my cadetship.
Work Cited
“Background Checks on Applicants with Criminal History,” ERH 102 Paper, VMI, 2017.
“Background Checks on Applicants with Criminal History – Revisions,” ERH 102 Paper, VMI, 2017.
“Background Checks: Don’t Make It Easier for Criminals Applying for Jobs,” ERH 102 Paper, VMI, 2017
“Background Checks: Don’t Make It Easier for Criminals Applying for Jobs – Revisions,” ERH 102 Paper, VMI, 2017
Garriott, Deidre, (“Background Checks: Don’t Make It Easier for Criminals Applying for Jobs” ERH 102 Comment on writing, VMI, 2017.