My tone of voice, the narrowing of my message and targeted audience, as well as integration of outside sources significantly improved as I wrote each new draft in Portfolio #3. In the first draft, I understood the overall idea I as trying to persuade my audience to believe, to use video games in education, yet I failed to narrow this message down to what I truly wanted to say. My message was far too vague. I portrayed video games only being used to target students becoming disinterested in education, which while true, was not what the only thing I was trying to tell my audience.  Improvement of tone of voice by analyzing the varying points helped focus my message to my audience yet I lacked resources and effective transitions between paragraphs. I was still too vague and unconvincing. Through the second rough draft there was some improvement and integration of outside sources that helped, yet my paragraphs still failed to flow into the final conclusion I was trying to present. Leading into the final draft I feel I finally added my own voice with the addition of more supporting outside resources. By rewriting many of my sentences I change the scope of my argument. Video games are not only used to target disinterested children, they can be used to improve education and learning for any student. If I had more time for another draft I would add addition outside arguments and personal analysis that would support my decision and add my personal voice to my argument.