From the first draft to the final draft I made a lot of progress in the effectiveness of my writing. At first I didn’t really have a good idea of what I was supposed to be writing. I had a good introductory paragraph, but other than that I didn’t have much of anything. I began thinking of what I needed and formed a base paper with the basic things, nothing fancy. I then tried to incorporate some good transition from paragraph to paragraph to help the fluidity of the paper. I was making the transition mostly at the end of my paragraphs, but then I began to understand that transitions work better at the beginning of a paragraph to introduce a new subject. I started to alter the paper to have better transition and to flow better. The other main thing that I focused on when revising my paper was the audience that I intended to speak to. The language that I used at first was not the best and most effective language for the audience that I was trying to connect with. The changes that I made throughout the paper helped the main message that I was after by making a clear audience and purpose of the paper. The transition also helped the message because the points that I make can be connected easily by the transition that is used. If given one more draft, I would probably focus on giving more specific detail and using the sources at hand more effectively.