The main thing that I have to work on that both of the papers did a better job at than I did is making a proper thesis. I kind of went off track with mine so I need to figure out how to change mine to make it better. The sample papers also do a better job at writing an analysis paper while I still need to work on my body paragraphs a little bit. Making sure I stop at the summary paragraph and not make the whole paper an analysis. I also need to explain more and go into depth with my analysis body paragraphs. I also need to make sure I do my work cited page correctly so I don’t get more points deducted.

My primary website, the ASCE main website, is a formal and informative website. I know this because it has multiple different sections that talk about the organization, the benefits of being a member, how to get a higher education, different careers that someone of this discourse community (cicvil engineering) can join, etc… As well as the way they have the format and word usage in their website that resemble an informative based site.

Thesis: The ASCE website affiliates with civil engineering by using Swales’ third characteristic and Gee’s secondary Discourse. By using a website, it makes it easier for people to search and find different topics about the organization or civil engineering conveniently all in one place.

Writing- is a form of communication through using the written language

Activities that include writing: English class, History class, texting, emails, writing books, magazines, newspapers, etc…

Activities that don’t include writing: math class, sports, driving, verbal communication

Why these activities don’t include writing: Theses activities don’t include writing because these activities do not need writing to be a necessary way of communicating to one another.

For paper 1, I was all over the place. I couldn’t figure out what to write about, how to set up my paper, and even how to start it. I was so confused what we were suppose to do because one of the first things she told us was that everything we learned in high school was completely useless. I was also just freaking out because it was my first college paper which I already know that I am not very good in english. Paper 2 went a little bit better than the first (hopefully it will reflect on my grade). It didn’t take me as long to figure out and ask about what we are suppose to do for it. So I got started on the paper earlier than I did before which I am hoping to do for our 3rd paper. Coming to class really helps out a lot just because the teacher explains what the assignment are and then if we need help we can receive it if need to be. Which I did take advantage  of these a few times for me and each time it helped me one step closer to finishing my paper and trying to make it better than the first one.

Question 1: Technology is anything that is a mechanical object that uses electricity or fuel to operate.

Examples: Computer, phone, car, printer, microwave, iPad, etc..

Examples of things that aren’t technology are: a book, clothes, food, a shoe

Question 2: Computer, phone, printer machine

Niko Nemceff

Maj. Garriott

ERH 101-03: Writing and Rhetoric

15 July 2016

Help Received:

Cameron Nagle NN

Jack Neenan NN

Writing Center NN

Taylor McGregor NN

Micheal McNamara NN

Justin Sells NN

Word Count: 1073

Discourse Community Analysis

The American Society of Civil Engineers (ASCE) is an organization that has thousands of civil engineering members in countries all over the world (ASCE).7 The ASCE is the head of multiple tasks which some of them are: to plan, construct, and to protect and restore the environment (ASCE). Through the expertise that the organization has, it is the number one provider for technical and professional meetings, furthering education, and it is the biggest publisher of civil engineering content (ASCE). The ASCE is designed to provide essential value to their members and their collaborators, advance civil engineering, as well as to serve the public good (ASCE). Some of the ways that the ASCE carries out their mission are to: further develop technology, advocate infrastructure and environmental protection, and to develop civil engineer leaders (ASCE). Ewa Bauer’s, “Why We Need Renaissance Engineers: Golden Gate Bridge Seismic Retrofit Phase II Case Study” affiliates with the characteristics of Swales’ theory on discourse community while also exemplifying Gee’s theory of secondary Discourse. For instance, the “renaissance” engineers have the goal of re-enforcing the Golden Gate Bridge (characteristic #1). In order for them to achieve that goal they need “standard” engineers (novices) to become a “renaissance” engineer (expert) (Gee’s dominant Discourse). And also there are benefits of being a “renaissance” engineer than a so called “standard” engineer has (Gee secondary Diescourse).

This article talks about the project of re-enforcing the Golden Gate Bridge in order for it to withstand a seismic event (Bauer). The location of the Golden Gate Bridge has an impact on its stability. It is in Seismic Zone four and is in between two major earthquake faults: the San Andreas Fault (seven miles west), and the Hayward Fault (ten miles east). Making it prone to earthquakes, engineers need to have a large range of skills to fulfill the requirements as a role of an innovator to make sure the structure can tolerate even the largest scale earthquake (Bauer). They also have to have the qualities as a “renaissance” engineer such as being well educated and/or exceeds in a wide variety of professions/fields (Bauer). These qualities allow the engineers to incorporate construction knowledge into the design/blueprint process and then use it for the construction process (Bauer). This project is significant by showing success for civil engineers to “possess solid technical expertise coupled with a cross-disciplinary knowledge of design and construction” (Bauer).

A discourse community is a group of people that have a broad set of shared goals (Swales 220). These goals are public, and in some cases these goals can be high level or abstract (Swales 220). The engineers mission is to check, fix, and re-enforce the Golden Gate Bridge. The “renaissance” engineers have the correct education in order to accomplish the goal that they are challenged to achieve (Bauer). They have the higher ability as well as flexibility to be the best type of engineers to get the job done. By reinforcing the bridge, they will have completed an incredible and insane project. And the outcome? To be able to keep the bridge functional and still for it to be one of the biggest tourist attractions that it is. Also to restore this old monumental bridge so it can last for years to come. This shows how this discourse community is able to communicate a common goal by seeing this bridge withstand an earthquake and to last for a life time.

Secondary Discourse is after the process of inner home socializing and then collaborate with public institutions (such as schools and organizations) (Gee par 10). Which then one will learn and gain at least one Discourse and then work with in that certain Discourse (Gee par 10). The point of this article is to get your typical “standard” engineer and to become a more flexible and knowledgeable engineer like the “renaissance” engineer. In which to carry out this transition, one must learn the new knowledge that a “renaissance” engineer acquires. So they would have to go to an institution like Gee discussed to gain this knowledge. And then be able to work in that Discourse which in this case is civil engineering. After this process of being a novice and learning the ways of an expert, they then become an expert and are eligible to work on the “Golden Gate Bridge Seismic Retrofit Phase II Case Study” (Bauer). This shows how this Discourse community has to be taught and learned by an expert at an institution in order to become an export.

Dominant Discourse is a secondary Discourse in which at a certain place and time, brings the potential of obtaining social “goods” (Gee par 11). Money, reputation, and status are all examples of these “goods” (Gee par 11). Becoming a “renaissance” engineer and being able to call yourself one is a new mile post in your engineering status. To be able to achieve a higher skill set in the civil engineering Discourse community. Also if you become a “renaissance” engineer, there are different benefits of being one. More complicated and specialized construction jobs have increased during the past fifty years (Bauer). Which increases the need for those flexible and higher skilled workers like the “renaissance” engineers. So changing from a novice to an expert through learning the skills at an institution will be worth it since there is a demand for those skills. Another benefit is that the starting salary for a civil engineer is around $79,000 (King). This shows how this Discourse community has multiple benefits or social “goods” of entering and becoming a civil engineer.

The construction of this article tells us the importance of a “renaissance” engineer. How they are more knowledgeable and flexible than a “standard” engineer, and why one should become one. Becoming an expert engineer, the projects will test and challenge your skill set in all sorts of manners. But the rewards of being a successful engineer and completing the different projects that you will confront will be great.

 

Work Cited

ASCE (2015): n. pag. Web.

Gee, James P. “Literacy, Discourse, and Linguistics: Introduction.” Journal of Education 171.1 (1989): 5–17. Print.

Wardle, Elizabeth and Doug Downs. Writing About Writing. Boston: Bedford/St. Martin’s, 2014. Print

Bauer Ewa, Cindy L. Menches, “Why We Need Renaissance Engineers: Golden Gate Bridge Seismic Retrofit Phase II Case Study.” 137(10): 901-905 (2015)

King, Michael (2012): n. pag. Web.

 

Discourse Community Analysis

The American Society of Civil Engineers (ASCE) is an organization that has thousands of civil engineering members in countries all over the world (ASCE).7 The ASCE is the head of multiple tasks which some of them are: to plan, construct, and to protect and restore the environment (ASCE). Through the expertise that the organization has, it is the number one provider for technical and professional meetings, furthering education, and it is the biggest publisher of civil engineering content (ASCE). The ASCE is designed to provide essential value to their members and their collaborators, advance civil engineering, as well as to serve the public good (ASCE). Some of the ways that the ASCE carries out their mission are to: further develop technology, advocate infrastructure and environmental protection, and to develop civil engineer leaders (ASCE). Ewa Bauer’s, “Why We Need Renaissance Engineers: Golden Gate Bridge Seismic Retrofit Phase II Case Study” affiliates with the characteristics of Swales’ theory on discourse community while also exemplifying Gee’s theory of second Discourse. For instance, the “renaissance” engineers have the goal of re-enforcing the Golden Gate Bridge. In order for them to achieve that goal they need “standard” engineers (novices) to become a “renaissance” engineer (expert). And also there are benefits of being a “renaissance” engineer than a so called “standard” engineer has.

This article talks about the project of re-enforcing the Golden Gate Bridge in order for it to withstand a seismic event (Bauer). The location of the Golden Gate Bridge has an impact on its stability. It is in Seismic Zone four and is in between two major earthquake faults: the San Andreas Fault (seven miles west), and the Hayward Fault (ten miles east). Making it prone to earthquakes, engineers need to have a large range of skills to fulfill the requirements as a role of an innovator to make sure the structure can tolerate even the largest scale earthquake (Bauer). They also have to have the qualities as a “renaissance” engineer such as being well educated and/or exceeds in a wide variety of professions/fields (Bauer). These qualities allow the engineers to incorporate construction knowledge into the design/blueprint process and then use it for the construction process (Bauer). This project is significant by showing success for civil engineers to “possess solid technical expertise coupled with a cross-disciplinary knowledge of design and construction (Bauer).

In Swales’ article, “A discourse community has a broadly agreed set of common public goals.” The engineers mission is to check, fix, and re-enforce the Golden Gate Bridge. The “renaissance” (Bauer) engineers have the correct education in order to accomplish the goal that they are challenged to achieve. They have the higher ability as well as flexibility to be the best type of engineers to get the job done. By reinforcing the bridge, they will have completed an incredible and insane project. And the outcome? To be able to keep the bridge functional and still for it to be one of the biggest tourist attractions that it is. Also to restore this old monumental bridge so it can last for years to come. This shows how this discourse community is able to communicate a common goal by seeing this bridge withstand an earthquake and to last for a life time.

First things first, make sure you cite every thing you use from the text. In a MLA format essay, you must have an in text citation after every sentence that has a quote from the text or even a paraphrase of the text. In order to do an in text citation you must have the publishers last name and then the page number if there are numbers(must be in a parenthesis). If there are no numbers then you just put the last name in parenthesis. Make sure if you paraphrase that you put it in your own words but still make sure it doesn’t venture off of the meaning of the text nor do not cut too close to the exact words and meaning of the text. Lastly do not plagiarize or you will be kicked out of school.

Positive: agrees, believes, expresses, interprets, says, thinks, acknowledges, suggests, writes, advises, emphasizes,

Neutral: allows, answers, asserts, claims, concludes, concurs, confirms, describes, discusses, lists, objects, observes, offers, remarks, replies, reports, responds, reveals, states,

Negative: charges, criticizes, declares, disagrees, disputes, opposes,

Activity 1:

My evaluation on “Clinton leads Sanders by 2.4 million votes, not 2.5 million,” is that it is true that she is winning by 2.4 million which is stated in the article, but I believe they should of used the exact numbers of votes that were casted in. The reason why they should of done this is so that the American people can actually see the exact numbers and the process of how they did it so that we know that these numbers aren’t false accusations. As well as it should of explained how they accumulated these numbers and which caucuses and/or primaries they used to get these numbers (Kessler).

Activity 2:

Caucuses were held in five different states which were not in the tallies(Kessler). There were also two smaller caucuses that Clinton won and the votes were recorded(Kessler). Also there was a primary that was sponsored by the Democrats Abroad that Sanders won by a huge lead(Kessler).