Where is the automobile industry headed?- Critical Reflection

The main changes I need to make in the essay revolve around going straight into the main topic and not following the directions for this first essay. I went straight into a synthesis and described my viewpoint and a description of the cars I was researching. Also I let my prior knowledge on this topic take over the essay. It felt more like I was talking in the essay because as I was brainstorming ideas they all revolved around my thoughts about these cars. So with how my writing style is, I just spit everything that was coming to mind into the essay. This made for a decent essay but it truly wasn’t on topic the entire time. Sure it was on my topic, but not on the actual given topic for this essay. But one thing that I didn’t really think about was my audience. I talked about some things that weren’t general knowledge and should have given a better description of them. This would strengthen my essay as it would give the audience a better understanding of what I am talking about.

The edits that I am beginning to make in this essay are taking out some of the conversational parts. As well as some of the sections of the essay where I go off topic talking about my knowledge and not what my research consisted of. There were also some minor changes that I had to make, like the usual run-on sentences and simple grammar mistakes. But overall I thought my paper so far was pretty solid but it definitely needs to be changed around a little bit. One thing that could strengthen my essay would be talking more about other people’s findings that I researched. Giving information from other writer’s research could strengthen my essay as it would make my claims seem more valid.

HR: None, Hunter Maul