Your essay gives great, specific facts about fishing. How could you still utilize these phenomenal facts to give the essay more of an informative purpose to go along with the assignment? What personal parts could be removed that seem to make it foggy what you are attempting to say? Precisely, what are the major points of your topic that you could use your facts to support? When reading your essay I here the good information but it seems a little confusing of what your standout main topic is. It seems to jump from your experiences and lakes and fishing.

I chose to start with a praise to encourage the student. I wanted to take a process over product standpoint. I gave questions to facilitate the process instead of just giving answers. I tried to focus on helping the student to focus on one goal at a time of choosing to narrow down what he is trying to say and how using his facts. i wanted to also give a play by play of what the essay comes off as as a reader of the piece.

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Cecelia E. Ivey