Kyle E. Coons

ERH 250W

Responding to Student Writing

4/4/18

HR: Microsoft Word, Students Drafts/Examples of how to respond, Lindemann’s textbook

 

 

Response to Steve L.’s Draft:

            Steve, I found the topic you chose very inviting as you are well versed and excited when discussing Bass Fishing. You covered in large detail one of your experiences catching a seven-and-a-half-pound Bass. Moving forward in your writing process I would take specific note into what the assignment says as to who your audience is. The audience in this case is people reading the newspaper with little experience, if not any, in Bass Fishing. Although it is good to tie in personal accounts to verify your expertise, I would suggest focusing more on the basics and fundamentals of Bass Fishing.

 

Explanation:

            I chose to direct Steve to focus on his audience because he seemed to stray from the idea that he is talking to inexperienced people and went on to write in a way that only people who have fished for Bass would understand. For example “I felt it and set the hook hard”. People might not understand what setting the hook means. Lindemann talks about directing writers to focus on their audience in her text on page 240.